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That Night, You Danced by ~FireSoulPhoenix:iconFireSoulPhoenix:





How cliché you were
My darling,
To tilt your head back willingly
And let the silver shards caress your neck
To bathe under the dryness of his breath
And taste the salty residue of his ache

Unable to cry after the fading daylight died…

Different colors made of tears
Now illuminate our candle-lighten lane
Where our footsteps burned our tracks into the ground
We left inside the cavern of his heart

A willow never weeped so sweetly…

I watched it all,
Your backyard transform into graveyard
While you sang in the wind from a willow tree
To tombs sealed with your crimson-colored kiss
A hint of sugar had adorned your lips
Telling of your morning tea

And the baby’s breath did brown with no remorse…

Talons bruise the feeble fruits of youth
Desert sands too beautiful for life
We’ll dance under the eagles overhead
For tonight,
We’ll have one final drink with death.
©2004-2009 ~FireSoulPhoenix
:iconfiresoulphoenix:

Author's Comments

I got unlazy and made a preview pic for once.

Don't ask what the poem is about, because I really don't know.

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:iconkernos:
this is a rather beautiful poem. the imagery is very romantic and very fluid. it takes on all of these proportions and flowery meanings. it's actually quite wonderful. reads like something from a dream. very nice work.
:icontalflamberge:
excellent, well done, it, as kernos described, is very fluid and the imagery is superb

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Okay that's it! You are about to be fried, broiled, and served up to my pet dragon.

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:iconnothingforsaken:
it's romantic in a sad way, so symbolic too. just beautiful.

i also love the preview picture, i'm a ballet fiend.
:iconfiresoulphoenix:
Thanks for your time and the lovely comment. :)

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Why Not?
:iconfiresoulphoenix:
I used to take ballet when was little. Then my dad took me out of the classes to do something more "practical." Which was piano. Blah, I learned nothing.

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Why Not?
:iconkernos:
your very welcome. :D
:iconxillionzginger:
Wonderfully said! Very beautiful, its great to hear from you again.
:iconfiresoulphoenix:
Thankies! Welcome back by the way. :)

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